Writing~

[BRIELLE "BLUE" MORGAN]

So, I've been itching to write in a new style for a little while now. I wanted to try it out with a possible character before I try adapting it to my current characters, so here's a little sample of the new style. I could really use some opinions on if it sucks or something.

She placed delicate feet, dressed in pristine stilettos, with precision. Confidence (& red) oozed from every pore. There was no room for uncertainty. The ghosties were watching her with

c a r e f u l (& redred) eyes.

They judged her, analyzing every move, every expression to cross her pale face. Nothing is hidden from them. Their (&redredred) eyes notice even the smallest of details,

ignored by a careless citizen.
YES,
humans are such lazy creatures.
THE GHOSTIES DO NOT LIKE THESE HUMANS.

They are b o r i n g, painfully dull. The ghosties, transparent and ever so (& red) pale, notice the details that the l a z y humans do not. They are observant, always watching Mona for mistakes and faults where she had none.

They had to watch the Red Queen.
Her head was far too large and (& redredredredred) one
might scream and shout, ordering her to get out
o u t with the b l o o d y Red Q U E E N.

She would scream and shout,
trying to claw her way out.
The ghosties would not help
their darling Mona, for soon,
she would lose her (& redredred) h e a d.

The night would claim its first victim,
dressed in the elegance of red.

(& redredredredredredredredred)

She is not willing to go.
Oh no, the Red Queen isn't done just yet.
Her party has just begun,
dancing in the (& red) spotlights
of the night.

Everything is painted R E D
in the Red Queen's lovely little world.

[collin]

I think it's beautiful and a very unique way of writing.